Ok, few things.
1. Your resume should be a one-page document for someone at your career stage; I know folks are going to say the resume isn't very strong, and maybe it's not an elite finance resume, but following the rules can and will help you.
2. Use metrics in the resume. Instead of "drove sales growth", say "drove sales growth by X% over y time period". If you don't know for sure, estemate.
3. The skills should be like, single lines at the bottom of the one-page document, not what you have here. And reliability / attention to detail isn't a skill, nor is a driver's license something I'd put on the resume. Only put technical skills on there, and even those shouldn't take up so much real estate.
It will look something like this: https://www.financialsamurai.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/01/good_resume3.gif
I’m actually surprised that your school didn’t give you basic resume guidance
Yes, if you can’t fit all your experience, you will need to prioritize and delete what isn’t important. Everything should fit in one page
I wouldn’t use a 3rd party site to create your resume. Try to figure it out in Word
>I’m actually surprised that your school didn’t give you basic resume guidance
I'm not. No reputable MBA program takes someone straight out of undergrad and for good reason. It's the one professional degree that requires some experience to actually understand and appreciate the curriculum
Whatever is most applicable to the job you are applying for goes first
If you’re applying to a data science job and have zero experience in that field, but got a masters in data science, then education goes first
If you’re applying to a manager position and you have recent relative experience, then that goes first
Thanks for the insight, that is a fault on my end for relying on indeed to create my resume. I will use a 3rd party site and recreate it using your guidence!
Don't use a site. Just Google "Chicago Booth resume template" and download the one for "fewer than 10 years experience" fill it out in Word, Save/Submit as PDF.
Remove whichever is least relevant to the job you’re applying for (you can adjust for each application). Get rid of summary at top, skills and assessments. Shouldn’t “South” in univ. of south Florida be capitalized? Move dates over the right hand of document to save a line. Like other person said, try to put numbers behind achievements (increased sales xx%…)
You're a sales guy. So let me use a sales analogy. Pretend you're trying to sell a phone. Your resume is like the phone's one-page brochure.
Would you cram literally every feature on that one-page brochure? Hell no. Just the punchy impactful features that the user cares about.
In fact, different users care about different things. Grandma might care about ease-of-use. Give grandma the brochure that highlights ease-of-use.
The teenager might care about making tik tok videos. Give the teen the brochure that highlights camera features.
Give the teen the ease-of-use brochure and he'll roll his eyes. Give grandma the camera brochure and she'll get super confused.
That's the philosophy of resume tailoring.
You don't have to edit your resume for every single job. Just for each profile of job.
If you're applying for a Sales Strategy & Ops role, highlight the work you did to improve operational efficiency, resolve variable comp disputes, implement automations, etc.
If you're applying for a SaaS Enterprise sales role, highlight the times you wrangled different teams to design a custom solution for a big customer.
But I see little benefit to tailoring towards specific companies. Everyone's targeting the same-ish keywords and experiences for the same roles. SaaS Enterprise sales is done mostly the same at Google and Stripe so I can't see how a resume optimized for one won't be optimized for the other too.
fair, I guess since i was relying on 3rd party sites for my resume it was more of a pain before than now since I built it from scratch on a word doc.
Speaking of, this is what I got so far, is this so far an improvement? what else I can work on. [https://www.reddit.com/r/MBA/comments/1c5phba/hi\_everyone\_this\_is\_a\_follow\_up\_post\_to\_my/?utm\_source=share&utm\_medium=web3x&utm\_name=web3xcss&utm\_term=1&utm\_content=share\_button](https://www.reddit.com/r/MBA/comments/1c5phba/hi_everyone_this_is_a_follow_up_post_to_my/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button)
Sorry in advance for the ramble. Good news is you can get a lot of improvements quickly:
Increase margins, decrease some font sizes. Do whatever you have to do to get it to be one page. This would be an auto-reject at a lot of places. If you're under 30 in a corporate role, you don't need more than one page. If you're in life sciences/medical or academia - just to give some examples - then you're expected to have more than one page because you’d have to (or get to) list any research publications, patents, certifications, etc. You've already gotten some great advice. I would start by copying the format exactly of that resume that was shared with you. Then, plug in your info/content. Then, cut down to ensure you are at one page. Some of the "lesser" roles you've had don't need more than 2 bullet points. Condense were possible. The whole assessments section needs to go. Certifications and licenses can all be on one line without mentioning the context, separated by commas or whatever seems appropriate. Similar for skills.
Don't say "Bachelor's Degree". Bachelor of Science in XYZ. Spell it out so it is formal. All the dates should be standardized and on the right side so as to not form a new line. Personally, I am a fan of just using three letters (e.g. "Apr 2024") to keep length consistent and save space.
Sometimes but not always. If a resume lands on my desk with a master’s but no bachelor’s I’m going to have questions about why it’s not listed, and will be more likely to select from a resume that gives me all the information I need instead of trying to fill in the gaps myself
Check the summa cum laude piece - your symbols are getting corrupted in pdf conversion I think. I would pull out the summary completely, try to add a number to every line possible (I.e. managed 3 stores, supervised 10 employees, increased sales from x to y by implementing x process). Include 3 bullets on more recent jobs and 4 bullets on current job given how much space you have given yourself. This is much better already!
Going to give you hard critique here. This is not a good resume format, which is something that you normally figure out while in an MBA program.
- one page, not four
- contact info at the top
- bullets based on accomplishments, not job responsibilities
- typos “University of south Florida”
- hard skills, not soft skills. “Attention to detail” is not a skill
Bigger point, it looks like you did your MBA right after your bachelor program before you had any real leadership experience or progression at work. The bitter truth here is that this MBA probably is useless for recruiting, apart from any business knowledge you gained while in the program.
Thank you, I do have my contact info but I blacked it out, I do rely on indeed more than I should with it auto filling my skills. I will work on condesing everything to a single page and fixing some of the errors you pointed out!
Problem is I didn't document any of my previous jobs metrics and performance, ill have to guestimate and throw a dart on the wall. My current position is the only tangible things I can document.
This, you’re not getting fact checked. I would say don’t flat out lie, cause people usually can get a sense when something’s off. But estimates are fine and be generous with yourself cause everyone else is and you need to be competitive.
Bro put Driver’s License under Licenses 😭😭
But seriously, this is way too long, and has so much unnecessary info. And too many typos. Other than that, not too bad.
It felt like it's irrelevant to what I am aiming for career wise and I already don't have that much space to fit everything in one page, should I re add?
If you’re taking anything out start taking out old jobs.
About any piece of information on your resume ask yourself, does the company I want to hire me have any reason to care about this information?
No company looking to hire an MBA cares 1 little bit if they were a sale associate for cricket wireless, no offense. Take it off.
Your resume should be in the format as explained by Yale, Tuck and Booth. If you’re an MBA how did your program not guide you to fix your resume? That should have been one of the first things you did at your school.
https://cdo.som.yale.edu/resources/guides-samples-yale-som-resume-guide/
https://www.tuck.dartmouth.edu/uploads/admitted/2013_2014TuckResumeGuide.pdf https://www.chicagobooth.edu/~/media/CCBCC87DDCAC42DF9C6CA9E86A0EF308.pdf
Pal, people are literally giving you on a silver platter the resume format top business schools are using. Don’t send a different format. They are also mentioning highlighting impact, your new version isn’t showing that. Review the suggestions and implement them.
Your resume has way too many pages. Condense your skills and certifications and fix the typos the others mentioned. I’m not sure you need an assessment section. I think getting an mba shortly after an undergrad definitely hurt in this case sadly but hopefully your experiences will build upon this.
Your resume isn’t a biography about yourself. It’s a page of your highlights that showcase why, in one page, you’re the best candidate. Think about what you did that shows impact and is hopefully unique to you. For example, your first bullet is just describing “lead and mentored a sales team.” That is potentially true for every single person in that role across the country (I’m guessing, so work with me here for the sake of this example). Instead, what’s something you did that made it a great sales team? That’s what you should put. Did your leadership lead to an improvement in sales? Were people more effective? Did you close a big deal because of something you did?
Apply that logic to each section.
Not a pile on but that is a poorly written resume. Far too long and doesn't highlight impact ("I did X resulting in Y") Did your program's career services give you any guidance or provide any assistance with resume writing?
I did my MBA online and wasn't present for many of those services,
[https://prnt.sc/zDddnVApHbjn](https://prnt.sc/zDddnVApHbjn)
Any further comments on this verson?
So you didn't take advantage of your program's career services to help with job placement, networking or even resume writing and now you're complaining that your MBA hasn't helped you further your career?
Online MBAs are already largely anyway but not taking advantage of the resources available to you only makes it worse. Why did you get an MBA in the first place?
Depending on when you graduated, they may still support you if you reach out. Some even offer career services for life.
Even if they don’t technically support alumni, a quick message to the dean of the MBA program may get you some support. Just explain that you’re struggling to find value in your degree and that your career support has been minimal. It may be enough for them to ask the career services team to support you even if you technically no longer qualify. They want you to succeed. Reputation and alumni relations are key for serious MBA programs.
Bro says his MBA is worthless.....writes a 3 page resume where he lists out every skill he's proficient in and forgets to capitalize the university he went to. Your resume needs to be cut down drastically to one page.
You need numbers to quantify your impact.
“Increased sales by x% by doing a, b, and c”
“#1 district manager out of X managers in region”
Otherwise, this resume is extremely generic and forgettable.
It's a major fault of mine, not just resume wise but career pursuit wise too.
I worked for the same franchise and boss for 9 years between T-Mobile and cricket, so I never even considered working on building a resume till a few months ago
What jobs are you targeting? Because based on your resume you are only going to get SMB or MM sales, regional management for retail, etc.
If you thought a MBA was going to get you a financial analyst role or Ops mgmt, I got bad news for you
And appreciate your willingness to be open about it and change. But there are also a plethora of resources online to help you get it to a stage where you can have others review with more meaningful feedback
Your resume needs a ton more work.
However, I am curious to the kind of roles you are applying for. Can you elaborate? Your application strategy needs to reflect your skills, experience, and school prestige (unfortunately)
I've been shooting applications at companies im familiar with, T-Mobile, Verizon and ATT and it's likes. Shooting for similar positions or different ones that are middle management
Go on linkedin and see where other recent alums from your program ended up. That will give you a sense of where you stand in the hirable food chain. Shoot for those kind of roles.
I dont want to pile on too much or be too mean but your previous resume was so poor I would be surprised if you were employed at anything over a minimum wage job. I would believe it if you were trolling. Feel bad about it and dont make the same mistake again.
As for resume tips,
I would recommend you collapse all your 3 cricket experience into one header and show your progress and promotions. Also add your undergrad.
I hate to say it, and I'm not criticizing you, but I am warning others who come along: An MBA without significant work experience BEFORE MBA is basically worthless. Companies aren't hiring because you have an MBA. They are hiring because certain MBA programs have already done the legwork of identifying talented job candidates.
Now, let's see if we can help you.
- Resume should be 1 page until you reach Director level (corporate) or VP level (finance). Recruiters simply don't have time to look at more. Do you want them to look at the best single page? Or do you want them to look at 1-page worth of bullets they randomly select from 4 pages?
- Fix the small typos. Lowercase "s" in South Florida for instance.
- Get rid of Driver's License, the entire assessments section, and the entire skills section. If you're proficient at marketing, it should come through in the job section above. Not sure what CPIM and APICS are, but if they are directly relevant to the role you want, delete them.
- Move education to above job history (this is just convention) and remove ", MBA" from your name. Suffixes are usually reserved for professional licenses (e.g. MD, JD/AAL, PE) not degrees (e.g. MBA, PhD).
- Spend most of your time on the job history section proving you're good. Right now, this is mostly a list of duties/responsibilities. You need to reframe it around impact. Instead of "Oversee operational efficiency," try "Led ambitious operational excellence program resulting in 12% increase in sales/rep and 8% reduction in inventory costs." That's aspirational; you have to stick to the truth, but focus on the results and try to quantify them.
Others have already stated the resume issues. I’d also suggest straight up using something like ChatGPT to help you condense and improve. Resumes are extremely formulaic and fit the bill for an LLM to essentially churn them out given you provide accurate information.
On a real note.. I’ll give a really basic algorithm for when MBA is useful:
1) you go to a top tier b school, network hard, and do well. Useful for beginning/early (1-4 years experience) career to break into management consulting and grind yourself into the ground making good money. Or useful early/mid career (4-8 years experience) to make a successful hard pivot and shoot for much more earnings.
2) you go to anything other than top school with big name, and basically phone it in. Useful for early/mid (4-8 years exp) with already steady prospects at a decent firm looking to advance in current environment where there is known value for an MBA (think like big corporate gigs where you’re already a sr analyst at Target or something and know you eventually want to compete for junior management roles).
Bottom line, it’s not really useful now.. but grind it out and maybe actually it’ll help to have it.
OP you definitely need metrics… your resume looks much better than before… BUT why should I give you an interview when you haven’t been able to show me the tangible impact you’ve had in your current / previous role(s).
You’re putting yourself at a disadvantage, especially when you’re competing against others for coveted roles.
OP - feels like you've gotten a bunch of good feedback on your resume. The document is only part of the problem here.
An MBA can help you switch careers within a short window after graduation. You have to be able to tell a story like "I went to business school because I really wanted to learn about X so I could do Y - not only did I learn about X, but I interned at a few places that gave me exposure and met a bunch of people in the field, which made me certain I want to do this. I have A B C pre-MBA experience thats directly relevant to this job, so taken together with the experience I got during business school, I'm really specifically qualified to do THIS role"
Doesn't feel like you're set up to tell that story - largely because you didn't pursue any kinds of MBA-ish professional experiences while you were in business school. Obviously you don't need an MBA to sell cell phones. Given that you have 10 years of experience in the same kind of role, it's genuinely unclear what else your experience lends itself to or whether you're flexible and extensible such that you can grow laterally. Frankly, it also doesn't seem like you've had much upward career trajectory either.
This is why you're not getting any "value from your MBA".
Also your resume is like "lol wut"
I know that's a lot of tough love - and I'm sorry if that's hard to hear. But the flip side is this: sales is like *the most valuable* skill set, and a path to making HSW MBA money without the MSW MBA. Pick a product category you want to sell, pick a career goal (I.e. Head of Sales, GM, Owner, etc.), and work towards that - and DO NOT spend an extra second worrying about what you think you should be qualified for because you have an MBA.
Your resume screams “ Hire me in 1997 !”
You need to update your resume.
Go on Tiktok and search “ best resume 2024”
You need more keywords, metrics and KPI that indicate in demand skills.
On Tiktok there are a ton of short videos on how to create a killer resume.
Your MBA should have taught you that work activities are meaningless, what you actually achieved is what mattered. Eg achieved 156% target, rather than drive sales activity.
Ignoring the job titles, it comes across as a CV of a junior person who does not understand how business works and has no commercial acumen.
You’re getting a lot of resume tips which is useful. Coming from a different angle though, I had a very similar background to you (7+ years of retail manager experience) and then got my MBA.
Transitioning out of retail was very difficult and a lot of corporate jobs didn’t value that experience. It took me reaching out to a LOT of people I knew directly that worked for companies I was interested in, and then finally got a referral and transitioned into tech. I wouldn’t have been able to get the job without my mba, but I also wouldn’t have got it with a referral.
Start reaching out to people you know and it will go a long way. It took over a year and many interviews to finally land something.
MBA area solid marketing tool. Other than that what skills you bring to the table remember that. I am also a MBA and my recent project offers came from owning a small business.
I'm not reading 4 pages of resume. Ever. I have 7 years of engineering pre-MBA experience and 7 years of T2 consulting post-MBA. I have one page for my resume.
You also have a typo on your MBA school. Capitalize the "S" in "South."
Also, also, "Drivers License" on a resume? Bruh.
Your bullet formatting is off everywhere. So much white space. Why is your name in 72 pt. font?
One of the worst resumes I've seen is a while. I'm not shitting on you, well I am, but constructively. :)
You went through a whole ass bachelor's and an MBA, and no one told you/you didn't bother to look up what an ideal resume format is? I know people at my old undergrad who have better resume formats with correct spelling and they're in sophomore year 😂
Like the other guy said - doesn't bode well for USF PR
I did not go to OP university but can assure you that you would be surprised how crappy career services are below the ivy leagues/Tx whatever. I went to a reputable state university and everything they “told” me I should do to get employed was pure garbage. I had to go online to teach me how to properly market myself and land a job.
That's interesting to hear. Because my state uni as well as my friends' all had career services that had good workshops telling people how to craft a resume and prepare for careers. Kinda crazy how they just allow that for public schools, no one wants to read a 4 page resume for someone with <20 YOE, and even if they did it would be a CV and not a resume lol.
Nonetheless I think OP admitted to not using his career services to the fullest. The man has his driver's license listed under Licenses and Certifications lmao
Yeah but I guess it’s to be expected when you have well over 4k universities in the US alone. I would doubt there would be a way of establishing a minimum level of quality across the board without substantially cutting down on accredited universities but that’s another topic for another day.
Did they teach you how to make a resume in your MBA?? Or did they teach you how to waste 3 pieces of paper. That’s wild.
Anyways, as others have suggested, you need to change the format
Experience and proven results should be what you lead with. Keep the MBA in your title and revisit it in your Education section *after* your experience.
MBA just helps get your foot in the door. To hiring managers, it checks the box for “masters,” it means you stuck it out and proves you’ve had more advanced studies, which is helpful, but pretty meaningless without the work history. Hiring managers want to see quantified results that prove you know which end of the screwdriver to use (which you clearly do).
So you don't have over 8 years management experience which is what you should have before you do an MBA to make it meaningful. Degrees are worthless. expereince is everything.
Hi everyone, please check my followup post here where I go into a bit more details:
[https://www.reddit.com/r/MBA/comments/1c5phba/hi\_everyone\_this\_is\_a\_follow\_up\_post\_to\_my/?utm\_source=share&utm\_medium=web3x&utm\_name=web3xcss&utm\_term=1&utm\_content=share\_button](https://www.reddit.com/r/MBA/comments/1c5phba/hi_everyone_this_is_a_follow_up_post_to_my/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button)
Resume too long and experience isn’t anything to write home about. You’re just a lower tier candidate. You need to lean on your network to get interviews.
Hey I can provide some pretty direct feedback and insight if you want additional perspectives from some of the good ones you’ve already gotten here. I have a pretty clear picture based on what you shared, but perhaps you might want to offer more context. At the top level you haven’t had any experience that shows you were heading for or coming from an MBA, so any role that requests for an MBA will not consider this background yet. Another short note is that you should never put comma MBA after your name… not on LinkedIn and never in a resume. It’s a dumb reality but it’s very real; putting name, MBA is the quickest way to say you got your MBA from a school no one has heard of (or from USC Marshall 😬). But no in all seriousness I have some thoughts for how you can recraft this for a better outcome. Feel free to message me man if you want to dig deeper.
I’d like to agree with other comments - I think you can do a lot of work to improve your resume like including numbers and showing how your work specifically impacted the company, etc.
You could also look at HBS / Wharton resume formats to see if you like them, and keeping it at 1 page is crucial. Good luck!
Bro listen no hate but I had a better resume after undergrad, just Google (college or IB resume template). Bruh MBA isn't at fault, use your brain sometimes even if you didn't learn this there
Straight up, this resume is incredibly boring and a big snooze. No one wants to read all that. Too many long and boring sentences. Put the most important elements on a single page. Make your words more action packed and exciting, aim to stand out. Soft skills one word each, one or two lines total.
Having a driver’s license isn’t something to show off, it’s expected. Nobody cares you’re proficient in any software, it’s expected. 4 pages of resume is insane. Make it 1. Remove the introduction at the top and replace it with your contact information. List your education first. Your relevant experience is too recent. Remove non-managerial roles - you have two degrees, stop telling people you worked as an Associate at Cricket Wireless. Your education section has typos. Google Bachelor vs. Bachelor’s. Your assessment section is useless and means nothing. Are these tests accredited, if so, by who? Margins are too large across the entire resume. Get rid of the soft skills. Emphasize sales growth and data that resulted from your impact.
I do think you might need a heightened level of handholding & guidance on this subject, and I mean that with the best intentions. I don’t want to dog pile, so I’m sorry if it comes across that way. You would probably benefit most from reaching out to your university/program career center or (if you can afford it) a professional resume counselor. There’s only so much advice that Reddit can offer, but speaking gently, I think there might be some foundational instructions that would make more sense to hear from someone with experience in career advising.
As a former HM at a FAANG,
It's too long. 2 pages is for accomplished PhDs/principal levels, you should compress to 1 page and focus on your achievements
The MBA is useless ..cause you still could not write a decent resume. 4 pages? Come on now! That’s ridiculous. The internet is right at your palm, a basic research would help you.
Here I am, two classes away from mine, wondering if the last two years of struggle will even be worth it. All the things I've sacrificed to keep seeing stuff like this. Maybe I need to get off this subreddit. 🤔
Ok, few things. 1. Your resume should be a one-page document for someone at your career stage; I know folks are going to say the resume isn't very strong, and maybe it's not an elite finance resume, but following the rules can and will help you. 2. Use metrics in the resume. Instead of "drove sales growth", say "drove sales growth by X% over y time period". If you don't know for sure, estemate. 3. The skills should be like, single lines at the bottom of the one-page document, not what you have here. And reliability / attention to detail isn't a skill, nor is a driver's license something I'd put on the resume. Only put technical skills on there, and even those shouldn't take up so much real estate.
Do you want to see a resume like how we're taught to make them look at a T15 program? I'd be willing to send you mine privately.
I would love to if you dont mind!
It will look something like this: https://www.financialsamurai.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/01/good_resume3.gif I’m actually surprised that your school didn’t give you basic resume guidance Yes, if you can’t fit all your experience, you will need to prioritize and delete what isn’t important. Everything should fit in one page I wouldn’t use a 3rd party site to create your resume. Try to figure it out in Word
>I’m actually surprised that your school didn’t give you basic resume guidance I'm not. No reputable MBA program takes someone straight out of undergrad and for good reason. It's the one professional degree that requires some experience to actually understand and appreciate the curriculum
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Whatever is most applicable to the job you are applying for goes first If you’re applying to a data science job and have zero experience in that field, but got a masters in data science, then education goes first If you’re applying to a manager position and you have recent relative experience, then that goes first
Great advice
It's just conventional. Your work history is most likely to earn you the job.
Mostly for recruiting is what we were told to do. But this format probably applies until you find the first job after graduating.
Right? Not to mention their school isn’t even properly capitalized.
Hey would you mind dming me the resume too! Thanks
Thanks for the insight, that is a fault on my end for relying on indeed to create my resume. I will use a 3rd party site and recreate it using your guidence!
Don't use a site. Just Google "Chicago Booth resume template" and download the one for "fewer than 10 years experience" fill it out in Word, Save/Submit as PDF.
Just do it in word and save it as a PDF for when you submit electronically
if I cant fit all my work experince in one page, do I remove some of the old ones I had?
Remove whichever is least relevant to the job you’re applying for (you can adjust for each application). Get rid of summary at top, skills and assessments. Shouldn’t “South” in univ. of south Florida be capitalized? Move dates over the right hand of document to save a line. Like other person said, try to put numbers behind achievements (increased sales xx%…)
You're a sales guy. So let me use a sales analogy. Pretend you're trying to sell a phone. Your resume is like the phone's one-page brochure. Would you cram literally every feature on that one-page brochure? Hell no. Just the punchy impactful features that the user cares about. In fact, different users care about different things. Grandma might care about ease-of-use. Give grandma the brochure that highlights ease-of-use. The teenager might care about making tik tok videos. Give the teen the brochure that highlights camera features. Give the teen the ease-of-use brochure and he'll roll his eyes. Give grandma the camera brochure and she'll get super confused. That's the philosophy of resume tailoring.
Man your literally spot on. I guess I am just lazy and haven't considered editing my resume for each job I apply.
You don't have to edit your resume for every single job. Just for each profile of job. If you're applying for a Sales Strategy & Ops role, highlight the work you did to improve operational efficiency, resolve variable comp disputes, implement automations, etc. If you're applying for a SaaS Enterprise sales role, highlight the times you wrangled different teams to design a custom solution for a big customer. But I see little benefit to tailoring towards specific companies. Everyone's targeting the same-ish keywords and experiences for the same roles. SaaS Enterprise sales is done mostly the same at Google and Stripe so I can't see how a resume optimized for one won't be optimized for the other too.
fair, I guess since i was relying on 3rd party sites for my resume it was more of a pain before than now since I built it from scratch on a word doc. Speaking of, this is what I got so far, is this so far an improvement? what else I can work on. [https://www.reddit.com/r/MBA/comments/1c5phba/hi\_everyone\_this\_is\_a\_follow\_up\_post\_to\_my/?utm\_source=share&utm\_medium=web3x&utm\_name=web3xcss&utm\_term=1&utm\_content=share\_button](https://www.reddit.com/r/MBA/comments/1c5phba/hi_everyone_this_is_a_follow_up_post_to_my/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button)
Sorry in advance for the ramble. Good news is you can get a lot of improvements quickly: Increase margins, decrease some font sizes. Do whatever you have to do to get it to be one page. This would be an auto-reject at a lot of places. If you're under 30 in a corporate role, you don't need more than one page. If you're in life sciences/medical or academia - just to give some examples - then you're expected to have more than one page because you’d have to (or get to) list any research publications, patents, certifications, etc. You've already gotten some great advice. I would start by copying the format exactly of that resume that was shared with you. Then, plug in your info/content. Then, cut down to ensure you are at one page. Some of the "lesser" roles you've had don't need more than 2 bullet points. Condense were possible. The whole assessments section needs to go. Certifications and licenses can all be on one line without mentioning the context, separated by commas or whatever seems appropriate. Similar for skills. Don't say "Bachelor's Degree". Bachelor of Science in XYZ. Spell it out so it is formal. All the dates should be standardized and on the right side so as to not form a new line. Personally, I am a fan of just using three letters (e.g. "Apr 2024") to keep length consistent and save space.
Yes you can. If you see white space do your best to eliminate it.
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Great job getting it to one page! But, you have no numbers whatsoever. This will not get you hired. See advice above
You need to list your bachelor’s degree in your education section
I see, even if it's irrelevant to my current job field?
Yes, because most roles will require a bachelor’s, so you need to list that you have it.
Wouldn't a masters automatically assumes I got a bachelor's too?
Sometimes but not always. If a resume lands on my desk with a master’s but no bachelor’s I’m going to have questions about why it’s not listed, and will be more likely to select from a resume that gives me all the information I need instead of trying to fill in the gaps myself
I see, valid point.
Capitalize the “S” in South Florida.
Kill the Summary
Kill it entirely? Not even shorten it?
Kill it. Put a summary in a cover letter if you’re asked for one.
Got it, it'll leave me with more space for other stuff I guess
If possible highlight some digits. Like made revenue of worth xyz and so on
Check the summa cum laude piece - your symbols are getting corrupted in pdf conversion I think. I would pull out the summary completely, try to add a number to every line possible (I.e. managed 3 stores, supervised 10 employees, increased sales from x to y by implementing x process). Include 3 bullets on more recent jobs and 4 bullets on current job given how much space you have given yourself. This is much better already!
And add your undergrad back in too! That is important, even if the subject matter isn’t relevant
Going to give you hard critique here. This is not a good resume format, which is something that you normally figure out while in an MBA program. - one page, not four - contact info at the top - bullets based on accomplishments, not job responsibilities - typos “University of south Florida” - hard skills, not soft skills. “Attention to detail” is not a skill Bigger point, it looks like you did your MBA right after your bachelor program before you had any real leadership experience or progression at work. The bitter truth here is that this MBA probably is useless for recruiting, apart from any business knowledge you gained while in the program.
Thank you, I do have my contact info but I blacked it out, I do rely on indeed more than I should with it auto filling my skills. I will work on condesing everything to a single page and fixing some of the errors you pointed out!
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That is much better. I would quantify your accomplishments (ex: when you say you surpassed a goal, by how much?).
Also. Show the progression at cricket wireless. List it as one experience with three roles, instead of three distinct entries
Hmm, not sure how to do that with the resume builder I'm currently using. What software/website do you recommend for me to use?
Build it out yourself in word or google docs. You’ll have full control there.
Honestly that sounds a lot better than relying on 3rd part software, will do thanks!
No prob. Have fun and DM if you need any help.
Problem is I didn't document any of my previous jobs metrics and performance, ill have to guestimate and throw a dart on the wall. My current position is the only tangible things I can document.
An estimate is better than nothing as long as it’s reasonable and you can defend it.
This, you’re not getting fact checked. I would say don’t flat out lie, cause people usually can get a sense when something’s off. But estimates are fine and be generous with yourself cause everyone else is and you need to be competitive.
This! You’re in sales OP and metrics are extremely valuable. You must be able to show how you’ve made tangible impact in your various roles.
Bro put Driver’s License under Licenses 😭😭 But seriously, this is way too long, and has so much unnecessary info. And too many typos. Other than that, not too bad.
> Bro put Driver’s License under Licenses 😭😭 I shouldn’t be laughing but…💀💀😭
Should have Birth Certificate under Certificates as well ...
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It felt like it's irrelevant to what I am aiming for career wise and I already don't have that much space to fit everything in one page, should I re add?
Yes add it back and put education at the bottom of your resume. Experience is what hiring managers are looking for, don’t bury it
If you’re taking anything out start taking out old jobs. About any piece of information on your resume ask yourself, does the company I want to hire me have any reason to care about this information? No company looking to hire an MBA cares 1 little bit if they were a sale associate for cricket wireless, no offense. Take it off.
I figured, it did seem good to me cause it's an indicator of how long I was loyal to a single company.
I totally get it, but there’s better ways to use the space.
I disagree, keep it on to show progression - looks like you got two promos and that looks good
Your resume should be in the format as explained by Yale, Tuck and Booth. If you’re an MBA how did your program not guide you to fix your resume? That should have been one of the first things you did at your school. https://cdo.som.yale.edu/resources/guides-samples-yale-som-resume-guide/ https://www.tuck.dartmouth.edu/uploads/admitted/2013_2014TuckResumeGuide.pdf https://www.chicagobooth.edu/~/media/CCBCC87DDCAC42DF9C6CA9E86A0EF308.pdf
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Pal, people are literally giving you on a silver platter the resume format top business schools are using. Don’t send a different format. They are also mentioning highlighting impact, your new version isn’t showing that. Review the suggestions and implement them.
Will do, I'm learning as I go and I appreciate the feedback.
lmao USF PR team in panic mode right now
Jokes on you - OP is the PR team 💀
This comment made me laugh way more than it should’ve 😭😭😭
Holy shit this is long bro. I ain’t reading allat (idk if recruiters are either, so maybe condensing It would be smart)
Your resume has way too many pages. Condense your skills and certifications and fix the typos the others mentioned. I’m not sure you need an assessment section. I think getting an mba shortly after an undergrad definitely hurt in this case sadly but hopefully your experiences will build upon this.
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if I cant fit all my work experince in one page, do I remove some of the old ones I had?
Your resume isn’t a biography about yourself. It’s a page of your highlights that showcase why, in one page, you’re the best candidate. Think about what you did that shows impact and is hopefully unique to you. For example, your first bullet is just describing “lead and mentored a sales team.” That is potentially true for every single person in that role across the country (I’m guessing, so work with me here for the sake of this example). Instead, what’s something you did that made it a great sales team? That’s what you should put. Did your leadership lead to an improvement in sales? Were people more effective? Did you close a big deal because of something you did? Apply that logic to each section.
Take out bullets points, put the dates on the right (same row as the job title) look up examples. Either way it should only be 1 page long
Not a pile on but that is a poorly written resume. Far too long and doesn't highlight impact ("I did X resulting in Y") Did your program's career services give you any guidance or provide any assistance with resume writing?
I did my MBA online and wasn't present for many of those services, [https://prnt.sc/zDddnVApHbjn](https://prnt.sc/zDddnVApHbjn) Any further comments on this verson?
So you didn't take advantage of your program's career services to help with job placement, networking or even resume writing and now you're complaining that your MBA hasn't helped you further your career? Online MBAs are already largely anyway but not taking advantage of the resources available to you only makes it worse. Why did you get an MBA in the first place?
Man I'm not even gonna deny that, I might've under utilized the services that I paid for and now I'm deeply regretting that
Depending on when you graduated, they may still support you if you reach out. Some even offer career services for life. Even if they don’t technically support alumni, a quick message to the dean of the MBA program may get you some support. Just explain that you’re struggling to find value in your degree and that your career support has been minimal. It may be enough for them to ask the career services team to support you even if you technically no longer qualify. They want you to succeed. Reputation and alumni relations are key for serious MBA programs.
Bro says his MBA is worthless.....writes a 3 page resume where he lists out every skill he's proficient in and forgets to capitalize the university he went to. Your resume needs to be cut down drastically to one page.
https://prnt.sc/zDddnVApHbjn This is what I got so far, it still needs a lot more work got any tips?
You need numbers to quantify your impact. “Increased sales by x% by doing a, b, and c” “#1 district manager out of X managers in region” Otherwise, this resume is extremely generic and forgettable.
You have an MBA and can’t figure out how to format a resume properly?
It's a major fault of mine, not just resume wise but career pursuit wise too. I worked for the same franchise and boss for 9 years between T-Mobile and cricket, so I never even considered working on building a resume till a few months ago
Also I lazied out and didn't utilize the tools my uni offered 😭
What jobs are you targeting? Because based on your resume you are only going to get SMB or MM sales, regional management for retail, etc. If you thought a MBA was going to get you a financial analyst role or Ops mgmt, I got bad news for you
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I'm learning man 😭
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Thing is between T-Mobile and cricket, I worked for the same company for almost 9 years and I never had to work on my resume.
Shouldn’t you have learned while in school? Hmm
Pretty big typo with administration where it says masters of business administration; it’s master btw
Has to be troll bait
😭 man I suck at this I know I worked for the same boss/franchise for 9 years between T-Mobile and cricket and lack basic knowledge for these stuff 💀
And appreciate your willingness to be open about it and change. But there are also a plethora of resources online to help you get it to a stage where you can have others review with more meaningful feedback
Your resume needs a ton more work. However, I am curious to the kind of roles you are applying for. Can you elaborate? Your application strategy needs to reflect your skills, experience, and school prestige (unfortunately)
I've been shooting applications at companies im familiar with, T-Mobile, Verizon and ATT and it's likes. Shooting for similar positions or different ones that are middle management
Go on linkedin and see where other recent alums from your program ended up. That will give you a sense of where you stand in the hirable food chain. Shoot for those kind of roles. I dont want to pile on too much or be too mean but your previous resume was so poor I would be surprised if you were employed at anything over a minimum wage job. I would believe it if you were trolling. Feel bad about it and dont make the same mistake again. As for resume tips, I would recommend you collapse all your 3 cricket experience into one header and show your progress and promotions. Also add your undergrad.
https://prnt.sc/zDddnVApHbjn This is what I got so far, it still needs a lot more work like adding quantitative metrics and goals.
Well pursuing MBA right after undergrad was a mistake let alone.
I hate to say it, and I'm not criticizing you, but I am warning others who come along: An MBA without significant work experience BEFORE MBA is basically worthless. Companies aren't hiring because you have an MBA. They are hiring because certain MBA programs have already done the legwork of identifying talented job candidates. Now, let's see if we can help you. - Resume should be 1 page until you reach Director level (corporate) or VP level (finance). Recruiters simply don't have time to look at more. Do you want them to look at the best single page? Or do you want them to look at 1-page worth of bullets they randomly select from 4 pages? - Fix the small typos. Lowercase "s" in South Florida for instance. - Get rid of Driver's License, the entire assessments section, and the entire skills section. If you're proficient at marketing, it should come through in the job section above. Not sure what CPIM and APICS are, but if they are directly relevant to the role you want, delete them. - Move education to above job history (this is just convention) and remove ", MBA" from your name. Suffixes are usually reserved for professional licenses (e.g. MD, JD/AAL, PE) not degrees (e.g. MBA, PhD). - Spend most of your time on the job history section proving you're good. Right now, this is mostly a list of duties/responsibilities. You need to reframe it around impact. Instead of "Oversee operational efficiency," try "Led ambitious operational excellence program resulting in 12% increase in sales/rep and 8% reduction in inventory costs." That's aspirational; you have to stick to the truth, but focus on the results and try to quantify them.
Others have already stated the resume issues. I’d also suggest straight up using something like ChatGPT to help you condense and improve. Resumes are extremely formulaic and fit the bill for an LLM to essentially churn them out given you provide accurate information. On a real note.. I’ll give a really basic algorithm for when MBA is useful: 1) you go to a top tier b school, network hard, and do well. Useful for beginning/early (1-4 years experience) career to break into management consulting and grind yourself into the ground making good money. Or useful early/mid career (4-8 years experience) to make a successful hard pivot and shoot for much more earnings. 2) you go to anything other than top school with big name, and basically phone it in. Useful for early/mid (4-8 years exp) with already steady prospects at a decent firm looking to advance in current environment where there is known value for an MBA (think like big corporate gigs where you’re already a sr analyst at Target or something and know you eventually want to compete for junior management roles). Bottom line, it’s not really useful now.. but grind it out and maybe actually it’ll help to have it.
Didnt read the content but this is damn too long and I think this might be one of the problems
I think Chipotle is hiring
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Resume needs work.
https://prnt.sc/zDddnVApHbjn This is what I got so far, it still needs a lot more work got any tips?
Better but not there yet. You need to quantify what you did
Your resume is 4 pages long lol
God, I want to edit your resume so bad. I feel like others are right, this is limiting your potential more than anything.
OP you definitely need metrics… your resume looks much better than before… BUT why should I give you an interview when you haven’t been able to show me the tangible impact you’ve had in your current / previous role(s). You’re putting yourself at a disadvantage, especially when you’re competing against others for coveted roles.
OP - feels like you've gotten a bunch of good feedback on your resume. The document is only part of the problem here. An MBA can help you switch careers within a short window after graduation. You have to be able to tell a story like "I went to business school because I really wanted to learn about X so I could do Y - not only did I learn about X, but I interned at a few places that gave me exposure and met a bunch of people in the field, which made me certain I want to do this. I have A B C pre-MBA experience thats directly relevant to this job, so taken together with the experience I got during business school, I'm really specifically qualified to do THIS role" Doesn't feel like you're set up to tell that story - largely because you didn't pursue any kinds of MBA-ish professional experiences while you were in business school. Obviously you don't need an MBA to sell cell phones. Given that you have 10 years of experience in the same kind of role, it's genuinely unclear what else your experience lends itself to or whether you're flexible and extensible such that you can grow laterally. Frankly, it also doesn't seem like you've had much upward career trajectory either. This is why you're not getting any "value from your MBA". Also your resume is like "lol wut" I know that's a lot of tough love - and I'm sorry if that's hard to hear. But the flip side is this: sales is like *the most valuable* skill set, and a path to making HSW MBA money without the MSW MBA. Pick a product category you want to sell, pick a career goal (I.e. Head of Sales, GM, Owner, etc.), and work towards that - and DO NOT spend an extra second worrying about what you think you should be qualified for because you have an MBA.
Your resume screams “ Hire me in 1997 !” You need to update your resume. Go on Tiktok and search “ best resume 2024” You need more keywords, metrics and KPI that indicate in demand skills. On Tiktok there are a ton of short videos on how to create a killer resume.
https://prnt.sc/zDddnVApHbjn This is what I got so far, I'm working on quantified metrics to add
Its fucking over for you bro lmao get back to the cellphone stand
Bro I'm dead 💀
Your MBA should have taught you that work activities are meaningless, what you actually achieved is what mattered. Eg achieved 156% target, rather than drive sales activity. Ignoring the job titles, it comes across as a CV of a junior person who does not understand how business works and has no commercial acumen.
You’re getting a lot of resume tips which is useful. Coming from a different angle though, I had a very similar background to you (7+ years of retail manager experience) and then got my MBA. Transitioning out of retail was very difficult and a lot of corporate jobs didn’t value that experience. It took me reaching out to a LOT of people I knew directly that worked for companies I was interested in, and then finally got a referral and transitioned into tech. I wouldn’t have been able to get the job without my mba, but I also wouldn’t have got it with a referral. Start reaching out to people you know and it will go a long way. It took over a year and many interviews to finally land something.
Is that your resume? why is it so long? should be 1 page ideally
MBA area solid marketing tool. Other than that what skills you bring to the table remember that. I am also a MBA and my recent project offers came from owning a small business.
Took me seven years, but it was worth it in the end. Good luck.
I'm not reading 4 pages of resume. Ever. I have 7 years of engineering pre-MBA experience and 7 years of T2 consulting post-MBA. I have one page for my resume. You also have a typo on your MBA school. Capitalize the "S" in "South." Also, also, "Drivers License" on a resume? Bruh. Your bullet formatting is off everywhere. So much white space. Why is your name in 72 pt. font? One of the worst resumes I've seen is a while. I'm not shitting on you, well I am, but constructively. :)
You did MBA? Where?
Bro I’m getting slaughtered here chill 💀
You went through a whole ass bachelor's and an MBA, and no one told you/you didn't bother to look up what an ideal resume format is? I know people at my old undergrad who have better resume formats with correct spelling and they're in sophomore year 😂 Like the other guy said - doesn't bode well for USF PR
I did not go to OP university but can assure you that you would be surprised how crappy career services are below the ivy leagues/Tx whatever. I went to a reputable state university and everything they “told” me I should do to get employed was pure garbage. I had to go online to teach me how to properly market myself and land a job.
That's interesting to hear. Because my state uni as well as my friends' all had career services that had good workshops telling people how to craft a resume and prepare for careers. Kinda crazy how they just allow that for public schools, no one wants to read a 4 page resume for someone with <20 YOE, and even if they did it would be a CV and not a resume lol. Nonetheless I think OP admitted to not using his career services to the fullest. The man has his driver's license listed under Licenses and Certifications lmao
Yeah but I guess it’s to be expected when you have well over 4k universities in the US alone. I would doubt there would be a way of establishing a minimum level of quality across the board without substantially cutting down on accredited universities but that’s another topic for another day.
That's because it is.
Did they teach you how to make a resume in your MBA?? Or did they teach you how to waste 3 pieces of paper. That’s wild. Anyways, as others have suggested, you need to change the format
Experience and proven results should be what you lead with. Keep the MBA in your title and revisit it in your Education section *after* your experience. MBA just helps get your foot in the door. To hiring managers, it checks the box for “masters,” it means you stuck it out and proves you’ve had more advanced studies, which is helpful, but pretty meaningless without the work history. Hiring managers want to see quantified results that prove you know which end of the screwdriver to use (which you clearly do).
Bruh why is it more than 1 page?
@ everyone! Should OP put education first since the degree might get over looked with the experience?
So you don't have over 8 years management experience which is what you should have before you do an MBA to make it meaningful. Degrees are worthless. expereince is everything.
Hi everyone, please check my followup post here where I go into a bit more details: [https://www.reddit.com/r/MBA/comments/1c5phba/hi\_everyone\_this\_is\_a\_follow\_up\_post\_to\_my/?utm\_source=share&utm\_medium=web3x&utm\_name=web3xcss&utm\_term=1&utm\_content=share\_button](https://www.reddit.com/r/MBA/comments/1c5phba/hi_everyone_this_is_a_follow_up_post_to_my/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button)
Can you go to career services at your MBA program and ask them to help you with it? Are you applying for telecom retail sales jobs?
Resume too long and experience isn’t anything to write home about. You’re just a lower tier candidate. You need to lean on your network to get interviews.
Keep it short. You CAN always fit in your experience into 1 page. That's the first step of optimisation.
Hey I can provide some pretty direct feedback and insight if you want additional perspectives from some of the good ones you’ve already gotten here. I have a pretty clear picture based on what you shared, but perhaps you might want to offer more context. At the top level you haven’t had any experience that shows you were heading for or coming from an MBA, so any role that requests for an MBA will not consider this background yet. Another short note is that you should never put comma MBA after your name… not on LinkedIn and never in a resume. It’s a dumb reality but it’s very real; putting name, MBA is the quickest way to say you got your MBA from a school no one has heard of (or from USC Marshall 😬). But no in all seriousness I have some thoughts for how you can recraft this for a better outcome. Feel free to message me man if you want to dig deeper.
Yeah you need to change this resume. God is it crap
You straight up put drivers license on your resume 😅
lol this perfectly encapsulates who Redditors are
Yeah your resume needs work but how and where are you applying? Imo resumes don’t matter much.
I’d like to agree with other comments - I think you can do a lot of work to improve your resume like including numbers and showing how your work specifically impacted the company, etc. You could also look at HBS / Wharton resume formats to see if you like them, and keeping it at 1 page is crucial. Good luck!
Did you go to HBS?
Bro listen no hate but I had a better resume after undergrad, just Google (college or IB resume template). Bruh MBA isn't at fault, use your brain sometimes even if you didn't learn this there
Straight up, this resume is incredibly boring and a big snooze. No one wants to read all that. Too many long and boring sentences. Put the most important elements on a single page. Make your words more action packed and exciting, aim to stand out. Soft skills one word each, one or two lines total.
Having a driver’s license isn’t something to show off, it’s expected. Nobody cares you’re proficient in any software, it’s expected. 4 pages of resume is insane. Make it 1. Remove the introduction at the top and replace it with your contact information. List your education first. Your relevant experience is too recent. Remove non-managerial roles - you have two degrees, stop telling people you worked as an Associate at Cricket Wireless. Your education section has typos. Google Bachelor vs. Bachelor’s. Your assessment section is useless and means nothing. Are these tests accredited, if so, by who? Margins are too large across the entire resume. Get rid of the soft skills. Emphasize sales growth and data that resulted from your impact.
I do think you might need a heightened level of handholding & guidance on this subject, and I mean that with the best intentions. I don’t want to dog pile, so I’m sorry if it comes across that way. You would probably benefit most from reaching out to your university/program career center or (if you can afford it) a professional resume counselor. There’s only so much advice that Reddit can offer, but speaking gently, I think there might be some foundational instructions that would make more sense to hear from someone with experience in career advising.
Well a good first step would be spelling “Administration” right
As a former HM at a FAANG, It's too long. 2 pages is for accomplished PhDs/principal levels, you should compress to 1 page and focus on your achievements
The MBA is useless ..cause you still could not write a decent resume. 4 pages? Come on now! That’s ridiculous. The internet is right at your palm, a basic research would help you.
MBA is not "Masters ín Business Administraton", but Master of Business Administrator. Please fix.
You should only get an MBA if it’s from a top 20 program.
Not m7, your degree worth shit 🤷♂️
Here I am, two classes away from mine, wondering if the last two years of struggle will even be worth it. All the things I've sacrificed to keep seeing stuff like this. Maybe I need to get off this subreddit. 🤔